Destiny (Review Topic/Ch. VI is up)

[kopakalady]

Destiny Review Topic

Destiny is a year long project(Started out as 'MoD Manga Comics' and mutated much since then) that I have been working on with the assistants of many dear friends from MoD, all the previous information, old art and so on can be found here . (DO NOT POST THERE, IT'S DEAD)

This story is and shall continue to be an illustrated Epic. Note that this was originally going to be a Comic, but after awhile I noted that I had not enough time and I would greatly prefer to do something like this anyway.

Also to those who are not familiar with the storyline like many are, this is not a 'Bionicle sucks' story! Bear with me and it will get better as we progress.

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!REMINDER! This story can get VERY confusing if you are not familiar with MoD. So please, try reading all the information on the review pages BEFORE starting the epic, it will help you understand and enjoy the story much more!

Chapters:

Prologue
Chapter I: Into the Mountains
Chapter II: The Scroll
Chapter III: Unbalanced Standards
Chapter IV: The Tournament
Chapter V: Sundown and Showdown
Chapter VI: Departures and Visitors
*New*


^As each chapter is added, it will be added here, for easier viewing if you wish just to see a certain chapter.

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References:

I and some others have decided it would be fun to add special jokes and lines in the story, waging from movie quotes to inside MSN/MoD jokes, so remember to keep an a lookout for these. And if you have any ideas for some, please tell me.

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Credit to:

Editing: Thank you Swert and Veno for going through and editing my horrid grammar. And I shall give thanks in advance to whoever else shall assist me in this in the future.

Ideas: Thank you very much Rapi, Swert, Aegis, Veno, Abyss, Dai, Emily, Imatron and many more for throwing out ideas. But seriously, my story would never be as close as good as it now without everyone’s help and opinions.

Title: Thank you many for helping out with the title for the story. Though thank you Brogen for coming up with Destiny.

Other: Thank you Veno for CGing a lot of my drawings, thank you Swert for showing off your photoshop skills in many of the pictures. And thank you Magz for the map that you made.

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One Request by the Author/Artist to her readers:

Also, if you are in the story, it would be greatly appreciated if you took your time and made a decent review. Even with your guys help, I am the one writing this up and drawing. I am not forcing you to or to make it a page long review but something better than "Oh your are brilliant, KUTGW!" would be nice.

But please enjoy! Feel free to ask any questions too.

[kopakalady]

Due to the many characters and mixed up storylines in this story, please take your time to read over the information so it will be easier to understand when reading the epic.

Characters:
(Right side of the members name is what they will be called in the story)

Abyss - Damien Gensou
Biocore - Brent
Brogen -Brogen Tee
Daikunus - Dai/Daisuke
Imatron - Imatron
Kokua - Kokua
Kopaka Lady -Kaila/Kay Kanjou
Maku - Emily Fa
Rapi -Kaden Rapius
Swert -Swert/Sai Wertz
Toa Bepura - Bepura
Veno Galius - Veno Young
Vahiki - Vahiki
Mark of MoD - Markus
Toa Hakaru - Hakaru Kanjou
Toa Shaman -Shaman/Himitsu Gensou

^Member based characters

Other Characters:

Emperor Tennou
Toa Iroik
The Admiral (Name not revealed yet)


Dark Hunters:

The Shadowed One
Lariska
Roodaka
Ancient
Zaktan

^Important characters that are not members, and are either made up/or official Bionicle characters that will show up. I am revealing them when the information is acquired by each chapter.

(Please remember that some characters costumes and even facial look could differ in the story because of drawing improvements or a new design that looks better)

[kopakalady]

Of the world of Makashi and the Plot

Plot/Setting:
The story starts out many thousand (By my theorized guess, since I know not what will happen to Bionicle in the future) years after our current Bionicle storyline and Humans have been sighted on the planet. Prophecies foretell a great new race to overthrow the Bionicle. Though the Bionicle ignored the headings of this Prophecy, and welcome the humans warmly. And even though all the humans were gracious of the assistants and being the allies of the Bionicle, 500 years later the Emperor Tennou announced in a horrific speech and believing proof of the Bionicle plans to overthrow the humans, brain washing his people in believing they were savages not be trusted the Emperor sent out his vast army to overthrow the Bionicle. This was a mere plan to take down powerful foes so the Emperor could have a better holding of his lands and beyond.

And that is just the prologue! More information shall be added as we progress in the Epic.


The location and information of Makashi. -Thank you Magz for making the map.


The Island of Makshi is an Asian themed island, following many of the traditions and styles of China, Japan and more. They do not believe in Mata Nui or any Great Spirits, as they believe the Emperor is some form of savior. Save for the small Academy that hides within the mountains, they keep the last bit of hope alive and true, keeping the path temporarily blocked of the Emperor so he will not cause anymore harm.

[-=Dark Ness=-]

*Inserts each of his reviews for each chapter here*

Can't wait 'til Chapter 7!

[Brogen]

*Copy Pastes*
Now that was one awesome chapter KL.
To begin with Vahiki walking the halls feeling all anxious about Zaktan and wondering what was happening seemed to flesh out his character a bit more, before I hadn't noticed to really much of character for Vahiki, but as soon as he found Shaman it was like, all there. Then the meeting of the elders around Shaman was pretty great too, it made the chapter, and Vahiki making his decision was perfect. I also think this part had the best art for the chapter, the shading between Imatron, Markus and Vahiki was great and it was one of your 'insane' drawings. Then the midnight meeting of the students was pretty cool as well.
The Swert torture scene was incredibly cool, imagining Zaktan being torn apart and then forced back together made me feel really happy for some reason, while at the same time it was really sad, seeing a helpless person, a mere shell of their former self being completely destroyed and then remade, over and over. It was just incredible.
Then the escape really made my day, I mean a giant rock, how cool is that?
Damien showing up was also a plot twist that I wouldn't have been expecting if it hadn't been for the DDs.

Anyway nice job KL.

Edit: Almost forgot, the Boot to the head was pure awesome.

[swert]

*also insert all reviews*

So, let's review six, shall we?

HOW DID YOU WRITE THAT THERE TORTURE SCENE?! IT SOUNDS LIKE SOMETHING RAPI AND I WOULD DO! ()

Uh, boot was awesome. It'll spark a meme soon.

Veno blushing ftw.

Chapter 7 nao! Thanks. -RR

[Kokua aviatrix]

*wonders when the next chapter will turn up*