*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Feb 1, 2008 14:57:19 GMT -5
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Feb 8, 2008 13:29:18 GMT -5
 Bump. Hello? Uh.. guys? Come on, it's not that bad... right? |
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Post by Kokua aviatrix on Feb 19, 2008 7:36:47 GMT -5
No it's good, just haven't had the time to complement you on what looks a very interesting story.
And can't wait to find out what happens next.
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Post by azblue on Feb 24, 2008 17:09:10 GMT -5
That is a really good story, Tahu_Nuva_Teen. You need to improve some on the grammer, such as the way that your paragraphs are formatted in the posts, but you do have a great story/plotline to work with. I love how you can feel the characters emotions.
A word of advice though, Don't use every single Character from Bionicle, or you will have too many characters, and not enough plot. Your story would end up with many plot holes. Believe me, I know from experience. When I first began writing Bionicle stories, back in 2003, I made up so many characters that I couldn't keep my story straight.
-azblue
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Feb 25, 2008 9:34:54 GMT -5
Thanks for the comments, guys!
Oh, thanks sooo much azblue, I was hoping to include the Toa Nuva, Turaga, Piraka and all the enemies, but I'll keep that in mind. Thanks Again!
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Mega ToaX
Toa Nuva
Fight the POWER!!!!!!
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Post by Mega ToaX on Mar 2, 2008 21:26:49 GMT -5
Nice story! I just can't figure out the plot right away, I need to think.
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Mar 4, 2008 14:14:26 GMT -5
Thanks! New chapter/page coming up, NOW!
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zarayna
Matoran
dont kill a toa Iden scum and you'll live a lot longer. -zarayna to zaprax-
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Post by zarayna on Mar 8, 2008 16:25:04 GMT -5
nice interesting cool. There are so meny words   |
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
Posts: 4,724
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Mar 11, 2008 10:26:53 GMT -5
Thanks. LOL. Welcome to MOD. New chapterr coming soon.
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Post by Kokua aviatrix on Mar 15, 2008 5:55:23 GMT -5
Brill, can't wait.  |
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Ria
Toa Nuva
Future Predator
Future Predators FTW!
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Post by Ria on Mar 19, 2008 14:05:28 GMT -5
This is great. Much better than the original.
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Mar 20, 2008 12:53:40 GMT -5
Thanks for the comments guys!
New page coming up!
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Ria
Toa Nuva
Future Predator
Future Predators FTW!
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Post by Ria on Mar 21, 2008 4:39:36 GMT -5
It just gets better and better. Thanks again for the advice on my short story
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
Posts: 4,724
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Mar 25, 2008 12:58:13 GMT -5
New PAGE!
No prob, Ria!
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Apr 3, 2008 12:46:51 GMT -5
Sorry to double post but, there's a new page up!
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Ria
Toa Nuva
Future Predator
Future Predators FTW!
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Post by Ria on Apr 8, 2008 14:01:39 GMT -5
Nice new chapter. Vezon freinds with a rakshi?
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Mega ToaX
Toa Nuva
Fight the POWER!!!!!!
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Post by Mega ToaX on Apr 14, 2008 19:00:13 GMT -5
Friends witha rakshi!!!!
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Apr 15, 2008 14:24:18 GMT -5
New Page!!!!!!!!
Sorry for the short wait.
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Ria
Toa Nuva
Future Predator
Future Predators FTW!
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Post by Ria on Apr 16, 2008 15:19:16 GMT -5
Wasn't Luhi a Toa of plant life inthe origanal ?
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Post by LORD INTERNET DOT COM on Apr 17, 2008 10:57:51 GMT -5
Wasn't Luhi a Toa of plant life inthe origanal ? DevilGET! |
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Apr 18, 2008 10:36:15 GMT -5
No, Luhi was always a Po-Matoran. Hehki was a Toa of plat life in the original though.
Aegis, what was that all about?
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Post by LORD INTERNET DOT COM on Apr 18, 2008 10:46:12 GMT -5
He got the 666th post in the forum and I felt the need to inform someone of it lol.
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Ria
Toa Nuva
Future Predator
Future Predators FTW!
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Post by Ria on Apr 18, 2008 10:47:07 GMT -5
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*Tahu_Nuva_Ninja*
Toa Nuva
Originally joined as Tahu_Nuva_Kid in September, 2004
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Post by *Tahu_Nuva_Ninja* on Apr 24, 2008 13:45:44 GMT -5
Hey, everyone, sorry for the long wait! I got writer's block. Sorta.
New page coming soon.
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Ria
Toa Nuva
Future Predator
Future Predators FTW!
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Post by Ria on Apr 29, 2008 14:14:32 GMT -5
The plot Thickens.
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Mega ToaX
Toa Nuva
Fight the POWER!!!!!!
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Post by Mega ToaX on May 1, 2008 19:43:34 GMT -5
The plot Thickens.
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Ria
Toa Nuva
Future Predator
Future Predators FTW!
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Post by Ria on May 5, 2008 15:33:49 GMT -5
Why did you copy me?
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