After the End: comment page

[Takal]

I've decided to take a leaf out of Kokua and Ria's book, and make a comments page, so that halfway through an important scene, there's a comment STAND TO ATTENTION, TK! and although there won't be anything to comment on until next tuesday, I thought I'd make this page now, for safety's sake. I'll also use this page for comments on Takal, Avak and RIA (am I getting sick of those names!)

[Ria]

*sigh* Time is running out.

[Takal]

Correction, my future-predator friend, time has run out. I am starting After the End.... Now!

[Ria]

Very good short one. I've taught you well. And thanks.

[Takal]

Good, good. Now the Aprentice will become the Mas...
Wait, Ria! I made up half of the whole story and more than half of the characters! That untidy plastic jungle under my bed, in my cupboard and in my attic isn't junk, you know!
You have: Ria, Maroo, Thero, most of Maveric, Vorsis, a matoran with a gun, and the old RIA
I have: Takal, Nuara, the other two Waru-solians, Axonn, Avak (with Cannok, Laserlight launcher, gun-like seismic picaxe, Jaller Mistika, Lariska, Kova, RIA II, Zahnok (RIA's second), Mr. Whopping Big Skrall What Looks Like Giant Axonn With Claws, Makeshift Mata Nui, Sorrowix, Immy MOD (though that has no storyline relevance), the exo-rahkshii and many, many more.

[Ria]

Yeah but who came up with crafting it into this sort of thing first?

[Monasti]

Mar 3, 2009 16:16:06 GMT -5 Ria said:

Very good short one. I've taught you well. And thanks.

Does this mean you have a 4 foot 5 friend aswell?

[Ria]

I actually can't remember his height. I know he has grown recently.

[Takal]

I'm bigger than five feet, Monasti. Just.
Now STAY ON TOPIC!

I have written something new, so if you want to post here, even off-topic, do me a favour and read it first.

[Ria]

I read and I like.

[Takal]

Oh goody, I have an animal's thumbs up.

[Ria]

He has risen. Welldone on that bit.

[Takal]

Thanks. I had a conversation with Monasti before you got here.

[Takal]

There will be no update this week because of porsche. He went on the computer when I had nearly finished the post and changed the page. I have no microsoft word page to copy/paste from, so I would have to spend the next hour rewriting it. I decided not to. Blame him. He will be punished.

[Specceh]

Your writing needs improvement. I will go into detail when I can be bothered.

[LORD INTERNET DOT COM]

it's been over a month anyway :/

[Monasti]

May 2, 2009 4:22:19 GMT -5 Specceh said:

Your writing needs improvement. I will go into detail when I can be bothered.

Constructive criticism Being completely annoying.


At least give examples?

[Takal]

I've been forgetting to update after the end for the last month, so I'm starting up again, but writing only one 'point of view chapter' each time I post, if you get my drift.

[Kokua aviatrix]

The new chapter's cool

[Takal]

Before Ria came back, no-one had any idea of the extent of the damage to Mata Nui. If Ria (the member of MoD) had finished his epic, he would have shown that Ria (the character) used a power like astral projection at his moment of death. He became omnipotent and had telekinetic powers. (explaining how Takal, RIA, Kova, Axonn and the weapons cache got to Bara Magna) He has seen what's happening in Mata Nui/Teridax and trying to get things done quickly without scaring the team, particularly Takal, with the news.
Just a quick explanation of why the pace is picking up, and why it won't be slowing down much.

Today is the last post of After The End in MoD, I'm putting it in the new site today as well.

Edit: I am really, truthfully sorry about the name Sistercia. It is impossible to take someone seriously when they are a warlady with 'Sister' in their name. I didn't make her up, Ria did. I did make up most of the character names, but Sistercia, Maroo, Torix, Thero, Ria (though not RIA, he came first) and Vorsis are Ria's names. Most I did, and some were joint efforts. Same with the MOC's of them.